Me & My Pen

**Vis** · March 14th, 2004, 03:26 PM

Ink in the center, with a miniscule of leather
gold plated, with my name imprinted in the header
Old, but not out dated, its vintange is the texture
the tip rolled, but not sezther..of the best - it's better..
The neck' black as shadow's, other's cant mesure
..to this..
Red hand grip's, and silver around it's hip's &
..I make sure the figure never chip's, ink blot dip's..
swiming in the pool of oil, in the case it sit's..
We gaze', and it has tendency's to turn me bliss
bring's envy-instantly, when other's use it.
If they grasp it to tightly, they might bruise-it,
polish it down, and smooth is slightly...
Unasemble it, and mask it nicely &
..reinsert it tightly, to make it cool and icy..
Add another coat of polish, and remove it lightly
try to perfect it.. I want it to be crisp, like me..
Never will lose it, as I grasp and tug, and push it
..into my pocket..
Make sure were never not sepret, always together..
even when ink run's out, me and my pen..
Forever.

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**Vis** · March 14th, 2004, 03:30 PM

upp ^

**Vis** · March 14th, 2004, 05:09 PM

man, cmon gimmie a reply.. up

**Vis** · March 14th, 2004, 08:23 PM

upp... drop soem links Ill peep ru shit if u reply..

**Vis** · March 14th, 2004, 10:52 PM

upp

**Chris Black** · March 14th, 2004, 10:57 PM

People like to sleep arounf here :-) . Anyway, this was a good read. I was really feeling the tone of the intire piece. The imagery was a plus, and your flow was above average. Concept was cool. Might have seen one om on the topic, but this was still pretty original. Overall it was an enjoyable read. Keep up the good work, homie.

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**Vis** · March 14th, 2004, 11:40 PM

Thank god for some fucking replies..

Cuthroat · March 14th, 2004, 11:49 PM

yeah this had a good flow too it. It was creative and really neat. Didn't notice too many multies, but multies don't matter in a piece like this. Stay up.

**2hot2handle** · March 14th, 2004, 11:54 PM

that was pretty tight man. but spell your word correctly.

mcBUtiful · March 15th, 2004, 12:46 AM

that was ill. you have a lot of talent. keep writing.

**Vis** · March 15th, 2004, 10:20 AM

yeah this had a good flow too it. It was creative and really neat. Didn't notice too many multies, but multies don't matter in a piece like this. Stay up.

K then u obviously, didnt read it. Cause at a diff board, someone told me they got alil out of hand sometimes lol..
up

**rasta_masta_247** · March 15th, 2004, 10:26 AM

yo kid wazzup it aight?

**Vis** · March 15th, 2004, 10:30 AM

^the fuck outta here..

**Endeva.** · March 15th, 2004, 11:40 AM

^^fuck... half of your post count is from upping this thread....lmao.... anyways, i liked your scheme, it flowed good and carried your verse well.... topic was ok.... bit played, but i still liked it... main thing id say is upp your voacb, dont need to go overboard, but it adds to the read... well i think, if its used right.... hit any of mine.... no sleeping...lol