i'm a whip somebody's ass

[big j da fat boy]

hook
i'm a whip somebodys ass
i'm a whip somebodys ass
cause they talkin that smack
cause they talkin that smack
i'm a whip somebodys ass
i'm a whip somebodys ass
they face gone get smashed
they face gone get smashed

verse
i talk that talk
but i can walk that walk
so i'm talkin that talk
while i'm walkin that walk
fuck around you'll be on the asphalt
mutha fucka outlined in chalk
don't fuck wit me................or my homies
i'll whip ya ass myself they just there routin fo me
i'm sick of muthafuckas talkin shit
scared to meet ya face to face but run they lip
the shit gettin deep
when you start fuckin wit me
but i got my shit kickers on
showin whats really goin on
i'm a take em to street church
protectin my mutha fuckin turf
ya mouths doin what ya legs should do
it's runnin ahead of you
you let it get the best of you
thinkin you incredibool
but i'm the hulk killa
think you real but i'm reala
i spit shit that a kill ya
bitch i just don't feel ya

hook

[big j da fat boy]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=275109
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=275085

[NiNjah Red]

uhm??.. seems like a joint more strictly for audio

had some good ideas in here.. but i reckon the flow could be developed to be more dynamic

i'd add on here and there..ie

fuck around you'll be "blah blah" on the asphalt
a "blah blah" mutha fucka outlined in chalk


some parts did seem to flow well tho]

ya mouths doin what ya legs should do
it's runnin ahead of you
you let it get the best of you
thinkin you incredibool

fosho

keep writin

pz1

[big j da fat boy]

thanks for the feed dawg

[big j da fat boy]

oh yeah an it is for audio

[OPIE TAYLOR]

gay gay gay!!!!!

[shazzzzzar]

honestly, this was pretty bad. vocab was basic, rhymes were basic, structure wasnt good, and the flow was mehh.. you needa elevate. definately needa work on it.

[Sin~A~Matic]

YO man it wasn't that gud cuz it was like a watered down whup that trick from Hustle and flow sry

[Breannah]

u need sum elevation to your skills son this wasnt all too good as far as the grammar that u used that was fucked up like a muafuckah try better bars to come with & put sum interest into your verses more flava

[rufus_dirty]

ok ok this was aiight --- ya know I see you 17 so you young but it was nice had a few good lines --------- I agree this is a straight to audio track but what type of muthafucka writes a rap that ain't meant to go to audio but with a banging beat I like the line -- ya mouths doing what ya legs should -- do it's running ahead of you -- that was hot I look for real lines like that -- that look simple but mean so much ya know but keep it up

[Grimey-Bruce]

shit was wack son...work on all categories possible...na'mean????

[big j da fat boy]

fuckin haters but thanks to the ones that left elevation feed

[ass_gasket]

tooo pop...sounds like shiot on tha radio...elevate.The flow was aight I guess but there wasnt any good wordplay or vocab